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Today's Inspirational Message 
9th-Aug-2009 04:37 pm
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Title: Today's Inspirational Message
Author: dreamer_marie
Pairing/Character: Logan/Veronica
Rating: PG-13
Summary: Veronica Mars, Veronica/Logan, Out of suffering have emerged the strongest souls. The most massive characters are seared with scars.(Khalil Gibran). Prompt left by onceuponapillow on comment_fic .
Spoilers/Warnings: The entire series.
Words: 1277
Any Author's Notes:
  • Anything goes, really: spelling, grammar, characterization,... I also have a tendency to write something that seems obvious to me, and then later I'm told that the reader doesn't understand what I'm trying to say or that I should expand the paragraph, so if you think I'm too curt or incomprehensible at times, don't hesitate to say so (it will feed my ego, anyway - who doesn't want to be a misundertood genius?).
  • I'm also finding it hard at times to describe how the characters are moving. If you're not sure what they're doing, let me know. Also, please let me know if you know at all times who is talking.
  • I'm European and therefore unsure about ratings. If you don't think PG-13 is the appropriate rating, let me know.
  • Thanks for your attention. I appreciate any comment and I hope the fic is enjoyable.

Hi, you've reached Logan with today's inspirational message: Out of suffering have emerged the strongest souls. The most massive characters are seared with scars. Khalil Gibran.

Hours later, Veronica was still annoyed by the outgoing message on Logan's cellphone. Strongest soul my ass, she thought as she was driving to the Neptune Grand. She was already in a bad mood, and Logan's quote-of-the-day made it even worse. The smug, ironic tone with which he always recited it made her feel positively homicidal.

She couldn't very well get mad at Logan for asking her to retrieve Dick's bag from the Sheriff's Department. Veronica and Dick had good reason to hate each other. They'd each had a defining hand in destroying the other one's life: Dick had spiked a drink with GHB that ended up in her hand and had proceeded to feed her more alcohol and egg his brother on to rape her. She, in retaliation (it felt too good at the time for her to fool herself that it was anything else), had sicced the SEC on his father. With one phone call, she'd blown over the house of cards that was the core of Dick's identity.

She'd often wondered, this summer, what would happen if she gave Logan any of that information. Ever since Dick's father had returned from the Caimans to face justice, Dick had crumbled. Logan had done his best to keep him alive and out of trouble, but it hadn't been easy.

"I'm just glad he doesn't know what his brother did to you. It would kill him," he told Veronica once.

She raised her eyebrows, but she didn't say anything. Logan had a tendency to gloss over Dick's less honourable qualities, just like he had glossed over Lilly's. She had no doubt that, if she told him the truth about Shelly Pomroy's party, he and Dick would be done, and it would probably be the end of Richard Casablancas Jr.

But what would happen if she told him who had called the SEC with that anonymous tip? The only thing he knew about her involvement with the Casablancas family was that she'd been hired to find out if Kendall was cheating on her husband (she was, but not with the county assessor, as Veronica had first thought). Would Logan still want to know Veronica if he knew what she'd done? What would happen to her without Logan? What would happen to him without Dick and her, for that matter?

So, maybe, what Logan didn't know wouldn't hurt him, and for better or for worse, Dick and Veronica were both Logan's crutches and Logan was theirs. They had no other choice but to tolerate each other, and when Logan called to tell her that Dick had been arrested for public drunkenness and that he had drugs in his bag, Veronica had sighed and gotten to work.

She let herself in the suite and dumped the bag on the coffee table.

"There you go," she said to Logan, blocking his view of the TV. "One roommate saved."

"Thanks," he answered, sounding relieved.

"You're welcome."

There was nothing more she could say on the subject, but the need to rant and rave at Logan about was just too strong to ignore.

"When are you going to stop that stupid message-of-the-day crap?" she blurted out.

"Why, what's wrong with it?"

Logan looked puzzled.
"It's driving me nuts, that's what!" she said, angry and gesticulating wildly. "Do you really think you're fooling anyone that you actually know these quotes and that you don't spend every morning trolling quotationspage.com?"

"Damn!" said Logan. "Here I was hoping people would think I hired someone to troll quotationspage.com for me every morning."

"Who the Hell is Khalil Gibran, anyway?"

"Poet? Artist? Philosopher? All three at once?" said Logan. "Why do you even care? I've been doing it for years, and now you decide you don't like it?"

"I've never liked it," said Veronica waspishly. "And see, you don't even know who the guy is."

"Oh yeah?" said Logan. He suddenly had that glint in his eyes and a smirk that meant nothing good. "Maybe I even own some of his artwork..."

"Don't give me that crap!"

Logan stood up and walked towards the window.

"Jeez, Veronica, why are you being such a bitch?"
"I'm not being a bitch! I just think that instead of wasting your time with just bite-sized quotes, you could read an actual book for once."

Logan rolled his eyes and then seemed to come to a decision.

"Remember that painting of my Mom's that you liked so much? The one with the woman in front of a rock, with her eyes closed and two fingers on her lips?"
"Yeah," answered Veronica. "Why?"

"That was a painting called The Silence by… Khalil Gibran," he said with a flourish. "Arab-American poet, painter and philosopher of the beginning of the twentieth century, most famous work The Prophet, which, incidentally, I read," he recited, giving her an angry look.

For a moment, Veronica was speechless.

"I didn't know that," she finally said.

There was a pregnant pause during which Logan was clearly waiting for an apology and Veronica decided that he wasn't getting one when she'd just saved Dick's ass for him.

"So what happened to the painting?" she asked.

"It survived," said Logan casually, looking out of the window. "It's in storage."

"That's a pity. It's a nice painting."

Logan shrugged.

"I'll hang it up again when I get my own place," he said.

He seemed so sad and deflated, suddenly. Without thinking, Veronica crossed the space between them and took him in her arms. He rested his cheek on top of her head, and for a moment they just stood there in silence, he taking in the scent of her hair, and she listening to his heartbeat against his chest.

"I went to see Dick in his cell after I was done," she finally said. "They said they would call you as soon as he wakes up. You'll have to nanny him a bit. Apparently he partied really hard last night."

"Just the usual, then," Logan said with a sigh. "I might as well declare my major in nursing right now."

Veronica snorted.

"Hey, I was going to order some lunch," he said, reaching for the room service menu. "Want something?"

"Yeah, that would be nice, thanks."

"You just saved my BFF from sharing a cell with Fisty McRapesalot," he said, smiling as he mentioned his own prison-related bogeyman. "It's the least I can do."

Veronica hung her head, a wry smile on her lips.

"Sorry for freaking out over your voicemail," she said. "It's just… rescuing Dick puts me in a bad mood."

Logan pulled her towards him again and kissed the top of her head. They both knew that it wasn't really Dick she was upset about, but the nerve-wrecking possibility of her father being indicted for destroying evidence. They didn't have the luxury anymore of getting upset over who slept with whom while they were broken up, or who was spying on whom while they were together. And maybe, if there ever was a next time without traumatizing tragedies to worry about, they would spend it a little less stupidly, enjoying themselves and each other instead of finding things to fight about.

"It's okay," Logan said. "He's just upset, you know, with his dad going to jail. He'll get better."

"Um-hm," opined Veronica.

"Burger with fries and ketchup, that okay with you?" he asked, looking at her face and pushing a stray lock of hair behind her ear.

"Yeah."

"Burger with fries and ketchup it is."

 

Comments 
11th-Aug-2009 07:30 am (UTC)
I really like this. You tackled the issue about how Veronica could tolerate Dick after all he did, and explained Logan's ignorance to the matter. I can buy, when it's explained, that Veronica would act this way but occasionally have those anger flareups every now and then, when triggered. And she would so take it out on Logan if he was a nearby outlet, and doing it over something so trivial as the quotes seems really right.

Also, I really love that Logan knows what he's talking about and gets to throw that in Veronica's face a little. The guy's smart, and he's always had an air of intelligence about him even when he's slacking off. Veronica never really gave him credit for that, and that confrontation reminded me a lot of 3.03 and the '1984' convo, and the way he let her know that, yes, he did actually read the book.

Some corrections: It's Cayman Islands, not Caiman Islands.

You have some spacing issues in places.

"Why, what's wrong with it?"

Logan looked puzzled.
"It's driving me nuts, that's what!" she said, angry and gesticulating wildly. "Do you really think you're fooling anyone that you actually know these quotes and that you don't spend every morning trolling quotationspage.com?"


Should be:

Logan looked puzzled. "Why, what's wrong with it?"

"It's driving me nuts, that's what!" she said, angry and gesticulating wildly. "Do you really think you're fooling anyone that you actually know these quotes and that you don't spend every morning trolling quotationspage.com?"

And you need to add a space after, "Jeez, Veronica, why are you being such a bitch?" and "Remember that painting of my Mom's that you liked so much? The one with the woman in front of a rock, with her eyes closed and two fingers on her lips?"

"It survived," said Logan casually, looking out of the window. "It's in storage."

"That's a pity. It's a nice painting."


It's probably just me, but maybe you could add a "Storage?" before "That's a pity." because when I first read that, for some reason I read it as her saying it was a pity it survived.

You can cut down on some spaces, too, by using the description of what the character is doing as a dialogue tag or before their dialogue, like:

Logan shrugged.

"I'll hang it up again when I get my own place," he said.


To: "I'll hang it up again when I get my own place," he said shrugging.

Also, I'd maybe change, "Um-hm" to "Mmhmm."







11th-Aug-2009 08:09 pm (UTC)
Thank you so much for the feedback! This is definitely helpful, mostly the spacing problem, because I just didn't know how to deal with that. Thanks, too, for the painting/storage problem. I actually pondered it for a while, but I couldn't come up with a satisfactory solution. This is why two brains are always better than one.
Thank you for your flattering comments on characterization. Yeah, Logan has always struck me as a textbook case of a gifted person who has no idea about his talents because of all those years of neglect (and possibly living in Duncan's shadow). The only one who tries to help him is Veronica, but she's just 19 (hence the way she tries to get him to apply himself more in his studies - which he interprets as him failing to meet her expetations), too, and she has her own issues. Veronica and Weevil are lucky, in that respect, because they have a dad and an uncle, respectively, who are truely nurturing...
And, yeah, I'm quite sure that ratting out Mr. Casablancas was partly revenge for what Dick did to Veronica - she was sorry for Cassidy (in retrospect, it's a bit ironic) but not for Dick. And there's just no way Logan knows what Dick did at Shelly Pomroy's party.
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