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Ficlet: As Changeable As The Seasons (V/L implied, R) 
10th-Nov-2007 08:02 am
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Title: As Changeable As The Seasons
Author: HokeySmoke

Fandom: Veronica Mars

Pairing: Logan/Veronica implied
Rating: R

Warning: No dialogue, some language, frequent mentions of sex.
Spoilers: All if it - implied

Summary: They have a pattern.

Word Count: 667

Author’s Notes: An experiment. This came to me early one morning and half of it was written in my head before getting to the computer. This is my first time visiting or posting to this community. Help a sistah out and throw a little constructive criticism my way.

Also, this is the edited version. My thanks to mastermia for the many helpful suggestions. (And hey! I just learned how to link to a member! There may be hope for my old brain yet!)

I kept the 4 week vacation time in. I feel it's a sign of too much disposable income.




Vernal Equinox - Day and night are the same length. Because of the earth’s tilt and the path it travels around the sun, it’s starting to get warmer and the nights are shortening. That automatically translates into less “indoor” activity. The anticipation of what they both know is coming makes them a little more abrupt with each other. Less tolerant, and it gets worse as June 21 creeps up on them. It comes faster because the days are longer, and they try to control their sharp words. They rein in their tempers as much as they can.

Summer Solstice - The longest day of the year, and consequently, the shortest night. They’re so in-tune with each other that when one sees this as today’s date the other groans in response. In spite of the cloying heat, it is a turning point. They keep telling themselves this as they spend their days lethargic and uncomfortable. The sheen/trickle of perspiration is constant now, not just during sex. For them, sex is a necessity.  Some days it’s almost 'hallway-sex’, biting back ‘fuck yous’ as they pass each other. During these long hot days of summer, sex is something they engage in, not indulge in; they do not revel in it. They do it because since they started, it’s been more of a struggle to not do it. These two can’t keep their hands off of each other. Everybody else knew it long before they admitted it to each other. Long before they admitted it to themselves. Each is the other’s drug of choice.

Autumnal Equinox - They breathe sighs of relief. The day and night are the same again, with a shift toward longer nights and cooler temperatures. They share longer caresses, more frequent secret smiles. They’ve been too hungry for each other long enough, and each is ready to binge after a summer of infrequent joinings. Oh, it’s still hot, but summer has lost its bite, its stranglehold. They’re starting to feel free again. Comfortable in their own skins, and a direct result is that they want to feel each other’s skin again. Their almost-hallway-sex of the summer is ready to turn into actual hallway sex. And coffee table sex.  They’re ready to re-dedicate each surface in their penthouse apartment to the worship of each other and the passion they share. Take that, shower wall! And that, tub ledge! We’ll show you, coffee table! They choose their locations as if they’ve resented them for falling into disuse. They couple as if it’s completely new to them. Each is re-learning the other. Sense memory takes over, and the exploration period doesn’t last long. It’s never stale, because they each have learned to be more spontaneous, more adventurous, more joyous. More “us”.

Winter Solstice - The longest night of the year is typically spent in bed, but never asleep. They keep the thermostat down for the whole place, so they can feel the cooler air against their skin. A trip to the bathroom is rushed, unless it’s going to include some shower or jacuzzi time. If one of those (once, both of those) is on the menu, they rush back to bed, still damp, and start over again. Many winter nights are spent this way. They fell into this pattern a long time ago, and it just feels right.

After identifying the pattern, they toyed with the idea of changing it... making it more consistent throughout the year. They planned trips for two weeks before and two weeks after each season’s marker. During this month of near-constant travel, they hopped from location to location, looking for the ideal climate for that season. Summer in Juneau? Winter in Australia or New Zealand? Spring in Paris? Fall in Vermont (for the color, mostly). They even talked about buying houses in each of these places. It never happened. By mutual, unspoken agreement, they chose to keep their established seasonal pattern and patter.

Why shouldn’t they?

It’s worked for them for so long.
Comments 
11th-Nov-2007 03:23 am (UTC)
Hmm! I like it, very interesting and insightful.

I'm not really that sure on the status of this community either but I hope you can find someone to work with you on it if need be.

The style of this is very different so I'm not really sure I would be comfortable in doing beta-ing, since I'm kind of new with that or that this even really needs it.

They’re so in-tune with each other that when one sees this as today’s date the other groans in response.

I'm not really sure I get this sentence though.
11th-Nov-2007 03:37 am (UTC)
kewl...

The part you didn't get...

The summer solstice is the first day of summer... June 21. I'm suggesting that when one of them is looking at a calendar and sees that it's 'today', the other responds to the fact that summer has arrived and they're going to be forced to slow down their sex stuff. Just an episode of being totally in-synch with each other.
12th-Nov-2007 02:19 am (UTC)
Why are they slowing it down? I'm sorry, I'm confused!
12th-Nov-2007 02:23 am (UTC)
Cuz it's too hot. I know I'm less likely to get all groin-y with my guy if it's hot outside, even if the A/C is on.
12th-Nov-2007 02:27 am (UTC)
LOL. I hear ya. But, I just don't really see the connection. Just a suggestion, but maybe you could make more of a reference to a sudden change in temperature or that it peaked for it to be suddenly unbearable.
12th-Nov-2007 02:31 am (UTC)
The thing is, it's not a sudden change... it builds up to being hot at the start of summer, then gets really hot about three weeks to a month later. At least, that's what it does in the midwest. I was making a reference to the change in temperature with the mention of 'cloying heat'.
11th-Nov-2007 04:34 am (UTC)
The community is still open. I will have some comments for you tomorrow if that's ok.
11th-Nov-2007 04:42 am (UTC)
That's more than OK, especially since I wasn't sure if anyone was doing anything here.
12th-Nov-2007 01:51 am (UTC)
I have a few suggestions for some small changes to tighten things up. Ignore or use as you wish:

The combination of the earth’s tilt and the path it travels around the sun, it’s starting to get warmer and the nights are shortening. Verb/subject don't match and the sentence doesn't make much sense as written. You might try: Caused by the combination...

You might try: The sheen/trickle of perspiration is constant during this timenow, not just during sex. It's tighter.

Some days it’s ‘almost-hallway-sex’ (biting back ‘fuck yous’ as they pass each other). Grammatically there is a a lot going on here. Maybe drop the parenthesis for commas? Some days it’s ‘almost-hallway-sex,' biting back ‘fuck yous’ as they pass each other.

During these long hot days of summer, sex is something they engage in, not indulge in; they do not revel in it.Nice sentence, but a semi-colon will highlight the last part and make it punchier.

Oh, it’s still hot, but summer has lost its bite, its grip, its stranglehold. A little repetitive. You might try it without "its grip."

They choose their locations as if they’ve resented them for falling into disuse. Great line.

Where is the diet between summer and autumn? You have them having sex in both, so the deprivation comment seems unsupported. And in winter I am worried about them catching pneumonia in wet sheets with no heat. Damp might work better than wet.

The paragraph that starts Once...doesn't really work for me. I like the extended metaphor of them syncing to the seasons, but the travel on the day and 2 weeks before and 2 weeks after seems...excessive. I think it might work if you reworked it to just imply that they had spent time looking for the perfect place to travel for each season and considered buying the houses. I love the "By mutual..." line, but I wish that you found another way to get there from the first line.

I liked it, and think it's a fresh idea. I hope some of my comments are helpful.
12th-Nov-2007 02:05 am (UTC)
Yes, very helpful. I'm thinking that the first line you commented on should be
"because of the earth's tilt and the path it travels around the...

The line you said was 'great'? Probably my favorite of this piece.

The 'diet' is more of a cutting back than a fast. Implied. I'll tweak it some, see if I can make it more clear.

I hadn't thought of them catching pneumonia. I was thinking that in southern California, it might get chilly, but not cold enough for them to get sick.

I'll work on that last paragraph, too. See what I can come up with.

Thanks so very much!
12th-Nov-2007 05:02 am (UTC)
Glad I could help. If you want me to take a look at another draft - you could e-mail it to me at mastermia [@] livejournal.com.
12th-Nov-2007 05:17 am (UTC)
Done. Many thanks. Again.
12th-Nov-2007 09:34 pm (UTC)
Hmm, and suddenly that e-mail does nto seem to be working. Try mastermia33 [@] hotmail.com
12th-Nov-2007 09:38 pm (UTC)
Done.
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